SPC: The Creature Returns

creature-in-the-sandAlicia loved this beach. She’d been coming here since she was a child. She breathed in the tangy salt air and lay back in the sinking lounge chair. Just as her eyes shut, a small hand grabbed her arm and frantically tried to pull her out of the chair.

She resisted and scolded her five-year-old son. “What’s with you, Timmy? Let me go! I just got comfortable.”

“But Mama, you’ve got to come see the creature!”

Alicia stared at her son. Timmy was known for his overactive imagination. She’d been the same at his age, but now it got old fast. She pulled her sunglasses down on her nose and said, “I don’t want to hear about any imaginary creatures!”

Hurt flashed through his eyes. She softened her tone and said, “Hey, I promise to go with you later, kiddo. Stay here and dig in the sand for awhile. Mama’s tired.”

But Timmy tugged even harder on her arm and pleaded, “It’s not imaginary, Mama. I promise. Oh, please come with me now!” Alicia felt a twinge of concern at the lisp in her son’s voice, a sure sign of nervousness.

With a frustrated sigh, she got up and let her five-year-old son pull her down the beach. She wondered what it was this time. Last time, he said he’d found a giant pile of bones. But when she got there, it was just driftwood half covered by sand.

Timmy pulled her up towards the dunes, gripping her hand so tightly it hurt. “It’s this way, Mama. Hurry or it might disappear.”

The thicker sand slowed them as they neared the dunes. Timmy pointed to something barely visible in the sand. Alicia saw it. There was something familiar about it. Her heart raced. She spoke quietly to herself, “It can’t be!”

But Timmy heard her. “You see it, too, don’t you. Hurry up, Mama!”

Now, it was Alicia’s hand tugging on Timmy’s. “Slow down, son and be quiet!”

They both walked silently through the deep sand until Alicia put her arm across Timmy’s chest, stopping him. She stared at the thing in the sand, knowing this time it wasn’t Timmy’s imagination.

“Oh. My. Goodness. He’s returned. I didn’t think I’d ever see him again! Let me tell you about him.”

Now it’s YOUR turn.

Story Photo Challenge 1:

What does Alicia tell Timmy about the creature? Try to keep this under 150 words.

Here are some questions to consider in your writing.

  1. Does he have a name?
  2. How does Alicia know about him?
  3. Why did he return?
  4. Where did he come from?
  5. Is he friend or foe?

Quickie Story Photo Challenge:

For those who need to stop and go:~) What kind of creature is this?

My example: a prehistoric pelican


14 comments on “SPC: The Creature Returns

  1. Kelvin Kao says:

    That’s your dad. Ten years ago, he said he was going to get a pack of cigarette from the store but he never came back. Apparently he’s been here on the beach with that skank all this time! Well, considering you are five and he left ten years ago, he wasn’t really your dad.

    Oh wow. I’m a horrible person.

  2. Lynn says:

    A wooden bear – submerged in the sand. That was my first thought when I looked at the photo.

  3. Jean Sampson says:

    OMG, it is the Beach Ness Monster! She has seen him once before, when she was about her son’s age and she has been looking for him ever since. He is visible only to certain tribes or families, and members have seen him off and on since pre-historic times, before cameras and when the only means of remembering was word-of-mouth. Now she realizes that her son has inherited the “gift of sight” that she has and her mother before her. The difference now is that she has a camera phone and can take a photo to PROVE that he is real to all of those folks who have never been able to see him and therefore do not believe that he really exists. She grabs her camera from her purse and snaps, snaps, snaps. When she tries to see the photo of the amazing creature, there is nothing there! Nothing that can be captured by a camera, that is. When she looks back, he is gone! But she and her son share a secret that no one can convince them is not real and true.

    That was fun, Sara! Thank you!

  4. Talon says:

    First off, Sara, amazing set-up here. I loved it. I could feel the sand between my toes and hear the crashing waves.

    Timmy learned the story of Old Man Croc. His bones wash up on the shore after every lunar eclipse, as if he has to appear only when there is a blood moon. Old Man Croc was responsible for many a campfire horror story. It’s said that he took the life of more than one man and once bit the toes of a child who had ventured too close to the water when his mother had told him to stay put and finish his sand castle. Some say when you see Old Man Croc you’re in for an adventure in your life. Some say it’s just coincidence that the same piece of driftwood arrives on shore. Timmy’s hoping for adventure. 🙂

    • Sara says:

      @ Talon — Welcome back, my friend. This was delightful. I loved the last line, “Timmy’s hoping for adventure.” The “blood moon” reference was good as well, especially since we just had one. I missed it due to cloudy weather, but the pictures were stunning.

      Thanks for taking on this challenge:~)

  5. Patricia says:

    What a good story – it looks like several river otters sticking their heads out of the tide foam while in search of salmon in the salt water…

    Thank you for this great read…
    And you just won a copy of A BRIEF MOMENT OF WEIGHTLESSNESS from my site…

    • Sara says:

      @ Patricia — I can see the otters. They are one my favorite animals. It’s so much to watch them frolic.

      Wow! That’s great about the book. I really did love reading the sample pages in it. She gave me a lot to read and I didn’t want to stop! For me, that’s a sign of a good book!

  6. Hilary says:

    Hi Sara .. after the driftwood had been passed and Timmy’s eyes were on his live find … they drifted to his mother’s … oh she was happy – her eyes were wide open and laughing quietly … she put a finger to her lips to keep him silent …

    … they watched leaning against each other … her young son against her lower body … she holding him … there were some scuffles, some light movement of sand … she was on her way to work again …

    … Thank goodness for that … Mrs Turtle was alive and well and too had brought her young to learn about nature at the shore line … they’ll be safe here … and she will bring Timmy back in 45 – 55 days to watch the little ones stumble towards their ocean haven to see their life out.

    She cradled her son as they turned towards home … then reminding him to keep their secret …

    Cheers Hilary

    • Sara says:

      @ Hilary — What a great ending to this story. I was witnessed a tiny turtle making its way to the beach. It was an amazing experience.To think they’re so small, but become so big:~)

      Thank you for sharing you creativity with the story!

  7. Linda says:

    Hi Sara,
    I love this story! It’s a great lead in to the photo challenge. My timeliness and creativity are seriously lacking these days.

    I think the creature is Satan. No, not the devil, Satan, but the seaweed covered remains of a shark. The one that attacked the mother ten years earlier, while she was diving for scallops. Yes, she was an adventurous gal before Timmy was born. She recognized the body from the jagged scar across what was left of his face. She had managed to slice him with her knife right before she was hauled back up into the boat.

    • Sara says:

      @ Linda — Excellent! I can see a shark in the picture and I liked the “ending” of the story.

      Hope the sun is shining and the breezes are nice where you’re at:~)

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